Its cold and dark. The playground is overgrown with weeds. A bench is where i sit waiting out my punishment. An empty seesaw covered in mold sits still cut in half. The swing is a broken chain that hangs lifelss. A slide covered in rust reaches down from the heavens. My clothes have no warmth, for every lean against the metal feels like ice against my back. I gasp for air from the pain it causes. As bad as it is here, there are places that are worse. Not far from where I sit is the slides new ending, which goes into a deep dark hole that could go on forever. It wasn’t A bottomless pit when I arrived. I landed in what felt like a grave but got out before it crumbled and expanded below me. I can see smoke coming from it but cannot feel the heat. I heard a noise of thunder and shook with fear as I heard screams coming from the pit. Rain began to poor as I saw what looked like a mangled being crawling out of the darkness. It looked like a dead woman whose hair was covered in blood. She had a green look to her face like she was a wicked witch. It began to speak and tried to convince me to follow her, but I refused. It continued to tempt me with promises of comfort and joy, but I rejected it. I couldnt understand it’s language anymore. It was speaking in tongues and began to growl at me dark low and loud. I prayed to the heavens and the monster came crawling out of the depths of hell like a spider. In seconds it took a hold of me and dragged me by the leg back on it’s way to the void. I yelled asking God for help and I heard a loud train. Winds began to form and the monster let out a cry of defeat before a beautiful golden mansion landed on top of it and sealed off hells entrance forever. It’s warm and bright.
Great post π
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Thanks, your blog seems pretty spectacular
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Thank you so much!!
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Were you dreaming again?
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Theres gold up in there hills
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wonderfully dark!
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Thanks for stopping by Orville. At least the conclusion is in the light
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Cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Always cool to see you here
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Very expressive. I enjoyed your words. π thank you
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God bless you Mags, I enjoyed your visit and welcome you to the rest of my library
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Thank you π
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Hello, you contacted me through Flutter by Literature. I want to start off by thanking you for your interest in my blog and what I do! I attempted to answer your inquiry through email but it seems your inbox is full so I couldn’t contact you there.
You asked me how to make a living through writing. For me, personally, I use Upwork.com, a free to use platform where you can sign up as a freelancer. There, you can find writing gigs that range from article writing to romance novels. I focus on romance novels because I think they are fun to write and pay the most.
In terms of your writing, I think it is good – although, it could use a bit of work. Your similes and metaphors are strong. I think you’re biggest ‘problem’ is your sentence structure. A lot of them are repetitive and follow a similar pattern. The art of writing involves varying sentences just like an artist would use varying brush strokes to make a painting. Try experimenting. If you don’t know where to turn, try reading work from other people and examine what they are doing.
Any other questions, feel free to contact me again!
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Yeah thanks for the advice. My grammars poor and my vocab is limited, but I’m confident the stories will go places. This one is just a short simple story. I’d really like your take on my golden ticket. The Writers Block, it’s not generic like it zounds. I’ve had others interested in publishing, just couldn’t agree on a number. Like you won’t be able to put it down, its gripping. That’s weird about the email. Maybe it’s why I I never hear anything
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I’ll check out golden ticket for you when I have a moment. And yeah, maybe consider cleaning out your inbox? (:
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Can’t wait to hear what you think
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Hello, I can’t seem to find Golden Ticket, think you could link it for me?
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Here you are Ms Bond, let me know if it works please https://gastradamus.wordpress.com/2017/11/29/the-writers-block/ if you have an issue finding it just scroll down on my main page it should be the 7th story down at gastradamus.wordpress.com
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I’ll look at it tonight (:
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Thanks beautiful
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Wonderfully dark but with hope and warmth in the end. Thank you so much for the follow. I really appreciate it!
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You are so welcome
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Stop dropping houses on me. I know the best parties are in the basement, but I really think it’s time I came up for some air.
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Lol love the response here, come on by more often
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I just may π
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I surely hope you do my pretty lol
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Thanks for liking my blog. i read some of your blog, i see that you are gifted in writing and that you write from the heart. i also think you are seeking, i like that. i hope you find what you are seeking. i hope you will return to read more.
blessings.
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Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
SUPERB WORD ARTISTRY—AMAZING DESCRIPTIONS—AND A HAPPY ENDING—LIKE THE WITCH BEING SQUASHED BY DOROTHY’S HOUSE IN THE WIZARD OF OZ!
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You got it bud. Thanks for the uplifting words
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And all true in my opinion! π
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Oh, the joy we get when we get victorious at the end of every battle. This is great buddy. Perfectly tailored and pierces the heart of great thinkers.
Beautiful post. Keep writing your heart out
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